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I'm lost...
and you can never find me...
I'm torn...
yet you can't see inside me...
I'm hurt...
and you can never fix me...
I'm cursed...
yet you cannot unjynx me...
I miss you...
how lame could those words be???
I need you...
like a bare necessity...
I'm drowning...
in my own chaotic mind...
I'm looking...
for what I'll never find...
release me...
and set me free...
erase me...
just let me be...
I miss you...
but I have to let go...
I need to...
why that is, I don't know...
i don't know...
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lolitazizi Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2011
luv itttttttt
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2011  Professional Writer
:blowkiss:
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chrysromeo Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007
each of your poems is just great...
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007  Professional Writer
I am eternally thankful that you took the time to read and comment my poems...
thanks a gazillion
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:iconchrysromeo:
chrysromeo Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007
I'm glad I had the oportunity to read them, it's not every day that I encounter a poet of your value :nod:
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007  Professional Writer
:blush:
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ada78 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2007
It's :+favlove:
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2007  Professional Writer
thanks a gazillion :blowkiss:
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ada78 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007
You are welcome!
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2007  Professional Writer
:worship:
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Lustful-IV-Blood Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2007
I love it..:(
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newborn-butterfly Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2007
lol thanks much for making me cry
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2007  Professional Writer
i'm sorry i made you cry
but on the other hand, keep in mind that tears wach out the heart...
so maybe it's better to let those tears out or else they would gather in a sea inside you and drown you...
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newborn-butterfly Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2007
with so much going on i couldn't let myself feel any of it... it was like if i let myself cry i wouldn't stop so i held it all inside. i didn't feel anything. saved it til it was more convenient. i know that's not the healthiest thing to do but it was like if just one thing made me cry it would break me... some days i'm okay. other days i'm so far from okay i can't see anything but bad in everything. i was depressed a few years back, never quite the same after it. i wouldn't say i am still depressed but my bad days are very bad and last for a long time. i've never really been happy either. the smile fades once the joke is told... i haven't talked to my family about it.... i hide it. i don't see it as important some days. my legs are covered in scars... i'm so screwed in the head and i just feel like i can't breathe
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PavSys Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007
I like the rhythm of the poem.
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007  Professional Writer
thanks alot
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beyonme Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Hobbyist
sorry if this sounds mean but i love ur pain
it creates diamonds :) :heart:
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
a diamond is a coal that goes through a lot of pressure...
I am not sure my coal turned into diamond yet...
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beyonme Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Hobbyist
sorry if this sounds mean but i love ur pain
it creates diamonds :) :heart:
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:iconlynnnie:
lynnnie Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
very very nice fletchy =}
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
thanks :blowkiss:
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:iconcyre:
cyre Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Its riddled with pain. I dearly hope that one day you'll be able to put this behind you...sounds like she wasn't worth you anyway. :hug:
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
we never were together
we never even talked about love
as soon as I felt that what i'm feeling is not friendship but mostly something stronger, it brought bad memories back and I ran away
If someone doesn't deserve the other, it's I cos I am the one that freaked out and flew before even anything happened
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Then you need to let it go, mate. We all make mistakes.
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
it's hard to let go
especially when my heart is beating so fast
when I have the same dream every day
when my lips whisper the same name over and over again
that's why I try to empty feeling in writing hoping i'll be ok...
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cyre Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007
Awwwwww, thats horribly sad!!
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:iconlynnelle:
Lynnelle Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
:sadangel: I don't know what to say anymore...I think it's best not to say anything...the speechless mode is killing me :hug: :hug: :hug:

beautiful job sweetie anjad beautiful job!!!
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
:(
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:iconlynnelle:
Lynnelle Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
:hug: :hug: :hug:
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
the pillow's my huggable friend nowadays...
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:iconlynnelle:
Lynnelle Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
But I still want to hug you :hug:
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:iconfletchergull:
fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
I don't deserve to be hugged, or to be loved or even to be...
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:iconlynnelle:
Lynnelle Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007
u know what!!! I decide if i want to hug u or love u or not wou heik!!! :hug:
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2007  Professional Writer
takes two to tango
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
But...other than that, great job. I love the tone and the mood.
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
thanks a lot :hug:
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LouiseOdier Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
ah fletcher, i deeply wish i could help you and wash it away with only one touch. :( i'm really sorry about your pain and the knowledge that i can't do anything for you. :hug:

susanna
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
susanna
you are doing a lot
trust me
:blowkiss:
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LouiseOdier Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
i trust you, hun and i'm very pleased to read this. :kiss:

susanna
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
:blowkiss:
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Hm... The word "unjynx" is kind of unsettling [mainly because it doesn't exist]. I suggest you replace it with "save". And the following line, "How lame can those words be???" The last line, "Why is that? I don't know..." is fine the way it is, but [just my personal preference], I think it should be "Why that is, I don't know..."
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
unjynx is done on purpose
I like it a lot
I usually use it
it's the opposite of to jynx :P
whether it's there or not, people would understand it...
as to the other two propositions
I like them and will fix them as soon as I log through a normal pc and not a ppc (since when I am on ppc I can't post deviations or edit them... I can only post and edit journals)
thanks a lot
mwah
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Yeah, I thought so. "Save" would screw up the syllable count.
"Unjynx" is a word that should be added to the dictionary. :]

And you are welcome for the other suggestions. :aww:
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
no no no
it's not about the syllable counts
cos you see this one has no specific syllable number
I just wrote what I wanted to say and the way it just came up
it is about being jynxed and someone removing this jynx off you... then it's surely the verb "to unjynx" :P
and no plz it shouldn't be added or else everyone would start using it... it's mine all mine... :P
:hug:
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Hahaha..... I'm sure others have used the word, though probably not "legally". And the syllable count affects the rhythm, which is probably what made it flow better. It's just... an odd word that I haven't read in far too long and so it felt weird to read that, especially when written by someone whose native language is not English. Heh.. ^^;
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
and by the way
in arabic, we don't count syllables to make a poem flow since we have a special issue of long and short vowels that influences the flowing even if the number of syllable match.
so it's usually something else...
to keep the poem flowing, we have to write following one of the "bouhours" (seas)...
we have pre set bouhours (seas) that we need to respect while writing and if we do then the poem will flow...
when the sea is not respected then the verse is broken and seems weird...
that's in classical arabic and in most dialectal ones too...
so sometimes a verse has 14 syllables while the other has 13 yet it still flows while some other times two verses have 14 syllables each yet the "bahr" (sea) is broken (broken is the term we use to say that the poem is not flowing as it should)... :)
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
...wow.. That's interesting. Seems more difficult to master than the sonnet.
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
IT IS
yet when you're born listening to poetry
your ear gets accustomed to hearing the different seas, and you usually write spontaneously following a certain sea without breaking it... it's all in the hearing... once your ear is trained you don't need to go through all the details of dissecting words to see if they fit or not... they just do...
what I like in arabic poetry is the wide presence of the visual metaphors and images in poetry... so it feels as if you're watching a movie in front of you...
ok, did you notice how much I love arabic poetry or not yet? :P
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fletchergull Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007  Professional Writer
ok I am seriously going to sue everyone who uses my word... :)
and as I said before, english is surely not my native language, lebanese dialect (arabic) is...
I miss writing in lebanese, I guess I should do it soon... only it's been a while I haven't been able to do it... :(
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Chaldemone Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
Aww... You'd better get practicing before you forget everything!! Vite, vite!! I forgot far too much of Chinese... *sigh* Do NOT make my mistake or I will hurt you. :fork:
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